notice drop into neutral waters no need of spark or flame mind will still flare that’s what minds do like fireworks watched from far away
Lovely! Neutral. Not still.
pretty much the best I can hope for....
I saw that.
I don't have strong feelings about it, although conserving words is often the better option, I've found.
Yeah, Peter generally suggests removing words. He's usually right.
Oooo. Good one!
Interesting. I like this one, too! A friend suggested removing the word "still" in the first line of the second stanza. What do you think?
Take out word , still , lovely poem, 💟 p
I'll think about it!
Nice
Lovely! Neutral. Not still.
pretty much the best I can hope for....
I saw that.
I don't have strong feelings about it, although conserving words is often the better option, I've found.
Yeah, Peter generally suggests removing words. He's usually right.
Oooo. Good one!
Interesting. I like this one, too! A friend suggested removing the word "still" in the first line of the second stanza. What do you think?
Take out word , still , lovely poem, 💟 p
I'll think about it!
Nice