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Jan Haag's avatar

Wow! What a powerful poem! It puts the reader (me, anyway) face down on that table, too, with my own heartrate picking up until I read,

"the gift, calm

foretaste

extended outbreaths,"

and then I can outbreath, too. Beautifully done!

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Amrita Skye Blaine's avatar

Thank you. I'm learning I need to write about these experiences. It helps metabolize them. I've done some light editing on this one--removed some commas and replaced with caesuras, and added "my" before sentinel.

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